Yeah, Clarke, there are reasons you're a cop not a politician. Poor Vahko CAN'T storm out or flip a table - such would play into the hands of those trying to paint koth as inherently violent or irrational.
Vahko is obviously supremely good at his job.
Since you've talked in the author's note a bit about how this arc developed I'll ask if you'd planned on the fool taking the fall for the pamphlets as an 18ish year old before or after our discussion on internet incels and propaganda directed at aggressive teens?
The kid's lucky Clarke got to him first. Holland took the food in stride, but the cracked toe might have pissed him off a bit. That's gonna hurt like hell for a month.
Ever crack a toe? I have. If you haven't, just a reminder it's gonna take 4-to-6 weeks to heal up, shoes constrict your feet, and you can't avoid standing and walking in Holland's job. Once the adrenaline from the chase fades he's not going to be happy.
Kinda expected this chapter to switch to Zoltan and Nisha for scene two. Not that, for this chapter, it matters much. After the first scene this was more about moving the plot forward than character growth. Although I enjoyed the printer's defensive pride in his work... I get that... As a camera op I've had to stay back and observe situations where I should have been involved because my job and focus was to capture the moment.
After you stayed in Clarke's POV for two segments - unusual in this tale - I expected you to stick with Clarke through the whole chapter as a way of building momentum. I hadn't realized you'd shifted to Holland for scene three until the door closed on his foot. I'm not sure if that's a potential style note or just idle observation. Either I'd missed the shift in the writing or there's something else you couid have done/said to clarify the POV shift after already breaking your usual pattern. Maybe Holland thinking something disdainful about the "posh place?"
Either way, ultimately, as you noted last week, there's multiple layers of misinformation.
Hope you've been enjoying Disney. Can't speak for Paris, but in Anaheim "Pirates of the Caribbean" is your "best value" time. The Anaheim version is the longest ride in the park at just under 15 minutes with an average line time of under 10. The Indiana Jones ride is the shortest at 3.5 minutes with an average wait time of over an hour. For Anaheim Disneyland Pirates is the only ride longer than its line. "Haunted Manson" is your next "best value." 11 minute attraction, average 20 minute line.
Hey, when you're a So-Cal local with a season pass you KNOW the line/ride length ratios for your favorites.
Good tips! Pirates of the Caribbean was probably my favourite ride last week. In fact, I might have to do a post about the ambient and environmental storytelling used around Disney (and in video games). It's a type of storytelling that I don't get to do in prose, and thus kinda fascinates me.
As for toes: while playing squash a decade+ ago, in my enthusiasm to get the ball I basically ran into the wall, but instead of my shoulder or hip taking the impact it was my big toe. Massively painful. The nail was crushed to a point that a few weeks later, there was a noticeable ripple bump as it grew out. Lovely!
I agree about the POV not being clear on Holland's piece. Will make some minor tweaks to that.
Definitely do need to get back to Nisha and Zoltan soon - and Lola! Feels like we haven't seen her for ages.
Pirates of the Caribbean for me is one of the two strong memories I have of my first time going to Disney World (Florida).
Coming out of that tunnel to the battle between the pirate ship and the fort. I would have been four or five?
Anyways, that moment etched in my mind. It's my single favorite bit of all Disney parks.
Of course that's when the pirate captain was Bkackbeard, before they redid him as Barbossa.
You could write many articles about the storytelling around Disney, and how it begins in the line. I'm sure everyone read the Haunted Mansion tombstones. Or, even on Main Street, where they blast the scent of baking cookies out to make you hungry. Storytelling AND subliminal messaging.
Oof. Sorry about the toe.
I dropped a chair on my foot once vaccuming the house barefoot. Right on the big toenail. Things swelled, the bruise popped the entire nail off, damaged the nailbed and, a few years later part of the bed had to be surgically removed because it had been driven down at an angle where there was serious ingrowth.
Yes we need to catch up with Lola. Last we saw of her she wasn't getting laid. She's had a lot to work through and a fair amount of time to process.
Yeah, the storytelling extending into the queues was really clever, and I hadn't expected that. The Spider-Man Web ride did a great job, as did Star Tours and PotC. In the case of Star Tours, I thought the line was more interesting than the ride itself.
I'm pretty sure the Paris version of PotC has Blackbeard as the pirate on the ship during that battle - Barbossa shows up later on in a cave of treasure.
All the Marvel themed stuff post-dates the last time I visited a Disney park...
But, I have (on paper) this really awesome shot of me and Spidey from when Universal Studios (Hollywood) had theme park rights to Marvel characters.
My then-GF wanted me to take a pic with Spidey, but I didn't want to do typical, boring, stand next to Spidey and smile, so I told her to give me her purse. I was trying to convince Spidey to act like I was a mugger and he was taking me out. His (in fairness justifiable) reaction was, "But what will that look like to the kids," to which I responded, "Like a crime fighter getting a woman's purse back!"
Spidey dithered and I (SHOULD NOT have done this) took his wrist and clutched it to my chest and hit my "mugger getting beaten pose." Spidey (to his credit) bowed to the inevitable and hit his "beat the mugger" pose.
It's an awesome picture, and I'm only sorry the actor in the costume never got to see it. 2002 was still disposable film cameras.
A decade later we could have shown him the phone pic and he'd have laughed, and said, "That's awesome!"
I did shake his hand and thank him for playing along, before loudly announcing that Spidey took great pics. It was my way of assuaging any fears from passing children who might have worried Spidey was being violent.
Earth First is a formal political party, albeit one that's been very fringe until recently. There is a lot of crossover with the dimensionalist 'philosophy', though Earth First aims to provide a respectable face.
Vahko is a recurring guest character who keeps insisting on coming back!
Yeah, Clarke, there are reasons you're a cop not a politician. Poor Vahko CAN'T storm out or flip a table - such would play into the hands of those trying to paint koth as inherently violent or irrational.
Vahko is obviously supremely good at his job.
Since you've talked in the author's note a bit about how this arc developed I'll ask if you'd planned on the fool taking the fall for the pamphlets as an 18ish year old before or after our discussion on internet incels and propaganda directed at aggressive teens?
The kid's lucky Clarke got to him first. Holland took the food in stride, but the cracked toe might have pissed him off a bit. That's gonna hurt like hell for a month.
Ever crack a toe? I have. If you haven't, just a reminder it's gonna take 4-to-6 weeks to heal up, shoes constrict your feet, and you can't avoid standing and walking in Holland's job. Once the adrenaline from the chase fades he's not going to be happy.
Kinda expected this chapter to switch to Zoltan and Nisha for scene two. Not that, for this chapter, it matters much. After the first scene this was more about moving the plot forward than character growth. Although I enjoyed the printer's defensive pride in his work... I get that... As a camera op I've had to stay back and observe situations where I should have been involved because my job and focus was to capture the moment.
After you stayed in Clarke's POV for two segments - unusual in this tale - I expected you to stick with Clarke through the whole chapter as a way of building momentum. I hadn't realized you'd shifted to Holland for scene three until the door closed on his foot. I'm not sure if that's a potential style note or just idle observation. Either I'd missed the shift in the writing or there's something else you couid have done/said to clarify the POV shift after already breaking your usual pattern. Maybe Holland thinking something disdainful about the "posh place?"
Either way, ultimately, as you noted last week, there's multiple layers of misinformation.
Hope you've been enjoying Disney. Can't speak for Paris, but in Anaheim "Pirates of the Caribbean" is your "best value" time. The Anaheim version is the longest ride in the park at just under 15 minutes with an average line time of under 10. The Indiana Jones ride is the shortest at 3.5 minutes with an average wait time of over an hour. For Anaheim Disneyland Pirates is the only ride longer than its line. "Haunted Manson" is your next "best value." 11 minute attraction, average 20 minute line.
Hey, when you're a So-Cal local with a season pass you KNOW the line/ride length ratios for your favorites.
Good tips! Pirates of the Caribbean was probably my favourite ride last week. In fact, I might have to do a post about the ambient and environmental storytelling used around Disney (and in video games). It's a type of storytelling that I don't get to do in prose, and thus kinda fascinates me.
As for toes: while playing squash a decade+ ago, in my enthusiasm to get the ball I basically ran into the wall, but instead of my shoulder or hip taking the impact it was my big toe. Massively painful. The nail was crushed to a point that a few weeks later, there was a noticeable ripple bump as it grew out. Lovely!
I agree about the POV not being clear on Holland's piece. Will make some minor tweaks to that.
Definitely do need to get back to Nisha and Zoltan soon - and Lola! Feels like we haven't seen her for ages.
Pirates of the Caribbean for me is one of the two strong memories I have of my first time going to Disney World (Florida).
Coming out of that tunnel to the battle between the pirate ship and the fort. I would have been four or five?
Anyways, that moment etched in my mind. It's my single favorite bit of all Disney parks.
Of course that's when the pirate captain was Bkackbeard, before they redid him as Barbossa.
You could write many articles about the storytelling around Disney, and how it begins in the line. I'm sure everyone read the Haunted Mansion tombstones. Or, even on Main Street, where they blast the scent of baking cookies out to make you hungry. Storytelling AND subliminal messaging.
Oof. Sorry about the toe.
I dropped a chair on my foot once vaccuming the house barefoot. Right on the big toenail. Things swelled, the bruise popped the entire nail off, damaged the nailbed and, a few years later part of the bed had to be surgically removed because it had been driven down at an angle where there was serious ingrowth.
Yes we need to catch up with Lola. Last we saw of her she wasn't getting laid. She's had a lot to work through and a fair amount of time to process.
Yeah, the storytelling extending into the queues was really clever, and I hadn't expected that. The Spider-Man Web ride did a great job, as did Star Tours and PotC. In the case of Star Tours, I thought the line was more interesting than the ride itself.
I'm pretty sure the Paris version of PotC has Blackbeard as the pirate on the ship during that battle - Barbossa shows up later on in a cave of treasure.
All the Marvel themed stuff post-dates the last time I visited a Disney park...
But, I have (on paper) this really awesome shot of me and Spidey from when Universal Studios (Hollywood) had theme park rights to Marvel characters.
My then-GF wanted me to take a pic with Spidey, but I didn't want to do typical, boring, stand next to Spidey and smile, so I told her to give me her purse. I was trying to convince Spidey to act like I was a mugger and he was taking me out. His (in fairness justifiable) reaction was, "But what will that look like to the kids," to which I responded, "Like a crime fighter getting a woman's purse back!"
Spidey dithered and I (SHOULD NOT have done this) took his wrist and clutched it to my chest and hit my "mugger getting beaten pose." Spidey (to his credit) bowed to the inevitable and hit his "beat the mugger" pose.
It's an awesome picture, and I'm only sorry the actor in the costume never got to see it. 2002 was still disposable film cameras.
A decade later we could have shown him the phone pic and he'd have laughed, and said, "That's awesome!"
I did shake his hand and thank him for playing along, before loudly announcing that Spidey took great pics. It was my way of assuaging any fears from passing children who might have worried Spidey was being violent.
Ah, the plot thickens. Just to make sure, as I haven't caught up yet, are the Earth First people the same as the One True Dimension people?
Vahko sounds like a fascinating character. A koth ambassador to the humans? That's got to be fun.
Earth First is a formal political party, albeit one that's been very fringe until recently. There is a lot of crossover with the dimensionalist 'philosophy', though Earth First aims to provide a respectable face.
Vahko is a recurring guest character who keeps insisting on coming back!
Thanks for reading. :)