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Mike Miller's avatar

Yeah, Clarke, there are reasons you're a cop not a politician. Poor Vahko CAN'T storm out or flip a table - such would play into the hands of those trying to paint koth as inherently violent or irrational.

Vahko is obviously supremely good at his job.

Since you've talked in the author's note a bit about how this arc developed I'll ask if you'd planned on the fool taking the fall for the pamphlets as an 18ish year old before or after our discussion on internet incels and propaganda directed at aggressive teens?

The kid's lucky Clarke got to him first. Holland took the food in stride, but the cracked toe might have pissed him off a bit. That's gonna hurt like hell for a month.

Ever crack a toe? I have. If you haven't, just a reminder it's gonna take 4-to-6 weeks to heal up, shoes constrict your feet, and you can't avoid standing and walking in Holland's job. Once the adrenaline from the chase fades he's not going to be happy.

Kinda expected this chapter to switch to Zoltan and Nisha for scene two. Not that, for this chapter, it matters much. After the first scene this was more about moving the plot forward than character growth. Although I enjoyed the printer's defensive pride in his work... I get that... As a camera op I've had to stay back and observe situations where I should have been involved because my job and focus was to capture the moment.

After you stayed in Clarke's POV for two segments - unusual in this tale - I expected you to stick with Clarke through the whole chapter as a way of building momentum. I hadn't realized you'd shifted to Holland for scene three until the door closed on his foot. I'm not sure if that's a potential style note or just idle observation. Either I'd missed the shift in the writing or there's something else you couid have done/said to clarify the POV shift after already breaking your usual pattern. Maybe Holland thinking something disdainful about the "posh place?"

Either way, ultimately, as you noted last week, there's multiple layers of misinformation.

Hope you've been enjoying Disney. Can't speak for Paris, but in Anaheim "Pirates of the Caribbean" is your "best value" time. The Anaheim version is the longest ride in the park at just under 15 minutes with an average line time of under 10. The Indiana Jones ride is the shortest at 3.5 minutes with an average wait time of over an hour. For Anaheim Disneyland Pirates is the only ride longer than its line. "Haunted Manson" is your next "best value." 11 minute attraction, average 20 minute line.

Hey, when you're a So-Cal local with a season pass you KNOW the line/ride length ratios for your favorites.

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Michael S. Atkinson's avatar

Yeah, rereading this now, I think I understand that slow unraveling feeling a bit more these days ...

On another note, I commented on Vahko the first time I read this, but also, you gotta love a guy who appreciates his work. You do you, printer man. You do you.c

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