"The first time she’d had a bath and had seen her new body in its entirety, she’d wept and wept until the bath overflowed."
Damn, Simon, that is such a vivid and heartbreaking use of imagery.
Pacing is fine - as you noted, this can't be rushed. Last week set up a question, now we have the answer.
Of course I've been predicting for nigh two years Lola would eventually gain powers - an awakening of latent magic from unknown Pallinorian ancestry. Obviously I was wrong about the ancestry.
I also predicted Lola's power up would be greatly traumatic - well, gaining vaen'ka abilities via limb transplant after dismemberment, and now being unable to touch Daryla qualifies as great trauma.
I'd rather have been right about the genetics and wrong about the trauma. Lola isn't cut out to be Rogue.
Of course we get into Pylpo's guilt as well. Still, Pylpo cracked the wrong joke at the right time. The laugh was welcome after the rest of the scene.
So, next week we go back to the big damn magic source eaten by the creation of the portals? Yup, doubling down on my next hilltop. 😉
Thanks. I was pleased with the bath line: stylistically, I don't often go in for dream-like metaphors and imagery, tending to be more literal in my writing, but hopefully that means they land more impactfully when I do!
The bigger question is whether they would actually have a bath. I think it's reasonable to assume that they'd have a pretty established and sophisticated camp in the rainforest, though, given that they've been based there for years.
The powering up of Lola was something I had in mind from very early on, though went back-and-forth on whether to actually do it. Part of me always worried that it was a bit rote, a bit too typical for a fantasy novel, and I was trying to tread a different path with Triverse. That's why it then became important to earn it, and not have it be easy.
As you know, I’ve been a fan of Lola since you introduced her. She doesn’t realize how brave she is.
"The first time she’d had a bath and had seen her new body in its entirety, she’d wept and wept until the bath overflowed."
Damn, Simon, that is such a vivid and heartbreaking use of imagery.
Pacing is fine - as you noted, this can't be rushed. Last week set up a question, now we have the answer.
Of course I've been predicting for nigh two years Lola would eventually gain powers - an awakening of latent magic from unknown Pallinorian ancestry. Obviously I was wrong about the ancestry.
I also predicted Lola's power up would be greatly traumatic - well, gaining vaen'ka abilities via limb transplant after dismemberment, and now being unable to touch Daryla qualifies as great trauma.
I'd rather have been right about the genetics and wrong about the trauma. Lola isn't cut out to be Rogue.
Of course we get into Pylpo's guilt as well. Still, Pylpo cracked the wrong joke at the right time. The laugh was welcome after the rest of the scene.
So, next week we go back to the big damn magic source eaten by the creation of the portals? Yup, doubling down on my next hilltop. 😉
Thanks. I was pleased with the bath line: stylistically, I don't often go in for dream-like metaphors and imagery, tending to be more literal in my writing, but hopefully that means they land more impactfully when I do!
The bigger question is whether they would actually have a bath. I think it's reasonable to assume that they'd have a pretty established and sophisticated camp in the rainforest, though, given that they've been based there for years.
The powering up of Lola was something I had in mind from very early on, though went back-and-forth on whether to actually do it. Part of me always worried that it was a bit rote, a bit too typical for a fantasy novel, and I was trying to tread a different path with Triverse. That's why it then became important to earn it, and not have it be easy.
See you on the next hill!