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I admit it... A tad disappointed with this chapter.

Which is entirely due to reader preconceptions, not anything in the writing. You read my comments last week, so you know I was expecting a huge and mighty clash of robot bodies - and there IS a huge clash of robot bodies, with one being ripped in half (and an "Alien" universe nod), and Justin dog piling on PB's current body with all the serving robots. So what's going on with my expectations vs reality?

Let's back up. The early parts of the chapter with Justin jumping into servant bots and telling everyone to run for it works. The tension is there. While you chose not to add the layers of virtual combat, it is implied (and I'm sure Justin('s shard - to be precise) worked triple-overtime to keep Probably Better from taking 20 waiter-bots and overwhelming our heroes with numbers) in the narrative.

So... I think it comes down to me overestimating how much force PB could/would bring to bear. My comments last week discussed the fragility of a space station, and hinted I was expecting robot bodies bursting through walls, and collateral deaths. Some random party goers being blasted into space, fire, explosions, structural failures. General destruction and mayhem.

So - and I again stress this is due to reader anticipation, not the story structure - when the SDC gang and Yana were back in the ship and strapping in for launch it felt too easy.

Now, I back up again and re-examine. Top of the chapter discusses how the main parts of Just Enough are far enough away for significant light speed delay. The shard of Justin operating with the SDC+Y is a subset of their full ability.

Not made explicit in the chapter, but there on reflection is Probably Better is in the same situation. There must be a processing delay between Probably Better's megaship on the moon, and the shard on the New Rhodes Station. PB is also hampered, and, for a quantum computing AI, even a couple of seconds of lag (a reasonable minimum assumption) can throw off PB's plans.

So the pieces are absolutely in place for the relatively smooth retreat to Beagle. It's fairly set up, and reasonably plotted, and there was some hard-core robot-on-robot violence.

It's just reader anticipation getting it wrong.

(Which is good. Surprising the reader is better than predictability.)

Backing up again, I did quite like diving into Nisha for a minute. It's good to see over the last five years she's gotten her substance issues controlled. Also, that bittersweet reminder of Zoltan's Dad.

Anyways - of course the escape isn't over yet. The stakes are high, and Just Enough is burning hell-for-leather. "Survival cocktail" is a good hint Justin has run Beagle's engines up to 100% percent. Maybe a 4g/5g burn, even! Probably Better is going to have more powerful engines since it's not built around the purpose of carrying people. We'll see how next week plays out. It'll be a tricky chapter for you to write, because, with the SDC+Y basically strapped into acceleration couches the next stage is two quantum AI's calculating orbital and thrust mechanics at each other - which will make it tricky to toss the action flow back to the people. I'm certain you'll make it work.

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