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Shane Bzdok's avatar

Thanks for featuring my article, "From the Zone to the Vault," Simon. 🙏 And hopefully, we'll see in the mix come November of this year!

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I suspect what happened at the Joint Tower made the march on Westminster easier. Let's face it, while there had been rioting, catastrophic collapse of a chunk of downtown London is going to help stop your riot. Police and emergency services MUST respond to the collapse, while a certain proportion of rioters -- decent people at heart -- will also divert to help.

You haven't described it (perhaps you should have? Consider this paranthetical a critique/question.), but PB moving at speed through the portal stations, the collapse of Joint Council Tower, damage to surrounding buildings and streets, not to mention inevitable fires and/or explosions (ruptured gas mains/downed electrical grid), flooding (damage to water pipes and sewers), and London is full of smoke, ash, dirt, asbestos (nah, Max-Earth would have stopped asbestos), etc in the air. The smells of smoke, ozone, (asbestos 😏), and, yes, blood ooze through the city.

Oh, right, then TWO Quantum AI Megaships burst back through the portal and fell on more buildings. Last week. That's action! That's also more drain on emergency services and more civilian distraction/Good Samaritan action.

(Now, here's a good question... Where, exactly, did the Palinor/Max-Earth panel open? Honestly, it's pretty damn lucky Just Enough was more or less immediately able to pop through from an open space. We'll have a longer chat about this on WhatsApp and you can tell me if I've found a legit nit or not...)

Thus, part of the reason this is a lower-key part of the climax is the exciting action sequence already happened. Riots, and the big booms downtown.

Nope, these are the shell-shocked survivors -- the few who held focus on the bigger picture of politics and justice in the face of immediate short-to-mid-term disaster -- tired, dirty, dazed, and holding their shit together with their last reserves.

Yannick Clarke knows all about focusing past the immediate situation on the big picture while holding shit together with one's last reserves.

Oh, there was the unseen action in this chapter. I'm sure Morgan had her fair share of shouting and shoving as the Earth First cops and MPs moved towards scorched earth assassination.

But we followed Clarke and Vakho, the two acting as leaders/figureheads of the crowd. Two (former) figures of authority and leadership in Mid-Earth as Ambassador and law enforcement, both (under false pretenses) humiliated and stripped of their authority, both taking it the fuck back.

Almost like the author planned it that way.

I spent a few minutes debating on if this may have worked better between Magic and Absolute Power. Nope. Not only because of the risk of breaking the flow... But because it works better if this chapter happens after all the Sturm und drang, and that's Just Enough and Probably Better deactivating in London. As you noted in this chapter, those reports of PB crashing through the portals came in "several hours ago," but the big climax in Palinor, despite the lengthy writing and multiple viewpoints probably didn't take much more than 1-2 hours.

Hmmmm... My brain keeps drifting back to how trashed Mid-Earth London has to be. Yeah, I think the chapters in Palanor lasted long enough where Clarke needs at least a sentence or two to acknowledge it on his walk.

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